- Erotic Poetry
- A Rain Mix
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Click hereFeeling echoes falling
from the dark,
another tear dripping
from the light of the moon
wakes me like rain
falling on the mangroves.
I search for the eyes
of lonely lost in chains
of rain's unsung blues.
I’d still be your piano,
a steady beat of your drum
or just another chord
that your guitar strums.
Such lives my opposite attraction.
Lonely sounds that says," will you play me"
- COMMENTS
My Erotic Trailalmost 18 years agoI become absorbed in your poetic words and enjoy your writes, (~_~) bows humble
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoYour words drip in my mind like the rain. Liked this, mentioned in today's new poem reviews
WickedEvealmost 18 years agoI like your use of the word mangroves and the lines about the piano, drums, etc in the last stanza. You could get rid of a few "ings" in the fist stanza.
Try something like this:
Feeling echoes falling
from the dark,
another tear drops
from the light of the moon
and wakes me like rain
that falls on the mangroves.
steve porteralmost 18 years agoreading the musings of bluerains and this poem is no exception...I especially enjoy the first verse with its moon tears and mangroves, and the third pulls things together and wraps up effectively...but maybe I would think about tweaking the middle 8, so to speak...I really enjoy the phrase "I search for the eyes of rain's unsung blues", but you don't have to listen to me...thanks, dear.
